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Udaan Sapno Ki

इस दिल ने कहा आज,
चल फिर कुछ गलतियाँ करें,
ना समझे रीत दुनिया के,
फिर से गिरें हम और फिर से उठे।

वक्त संजो रहा कई रंग अपने,
चल इंद्रधनुष की खोज करें,
प्रकृतिक है जो उससे मिलें,
वरना बेरंग ये ज़िन्दगी लगे।

हसरतें वो क्यों तय करें,
ज़रुरतें दिल की कैसे कोई और जानें,
कई खरोंचे है वास्तविकता की,
फिर भी अविचल मन किसीसे ना डरें।

आसान नहीं यूं उडा़न सपनो की भरना,
वो कहते है ज़िन्दगी बहुत कठोर है,
हँस देती है जाह्नवी यूही बात सुनकर,
जो आसानी से मिलें वो मेरा नहीं हैं।

पहलू कई है राही के सफ़र में,
कहीं भटक जाए तो कभी उभर जाए,
सय्यम अपना ना खोए जो इस दौरान,
वहीं मनुष्य अपनी मंज़िल को पाए।

दुनिया के आईनें भी दिखा जाते हैं,
कभी हँसा जाते हैं कभी रुला जाते है,
हताश ना हो तू परछाईयों से,
वहीं तो हमें बहुत कुछ सिखा जाते हैं।

Jahnabee is an Independent working lady, Pet lovers, travel freak, music mind, culinary explorer, an extrovert and at the very core…a poet.

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11 Comments

11 Comments

  1. Anonymous

    December 5, 2019 at 6:22 PM

    Wowwwww…poetic brilliance
    Too good Jahnabee

  2. Sanghamitra

    December 5, 2019 at 8:01 PM

    Wow…u r so talented dear..

    • Jahnabee

      December 6, 2019 at 7:23 AM

      Thankew sanghumuch love

  3. Anonymous

    December 5, 2019 at 9:28 PM

    Lovely poetry di

  4. Suman Kant jha

    December 6, 2019 at 1:45 AM

    Beautiful lines.. brilliant work and ideology.. wonderful

    • Jahnabee

      December 6, 2019 at 7:23 AM

      @suman thnxx and keep blessing me..

  5. Saurav Bansal

    December 6, 2019 at 1:33 PM

    Osummm jaan… Brilliant work..

    “har kisi ka nazariya alag hota hai,
    Yun hi nahi ravaiya alag hota hai,
    Likhne ki adat to bahuton ko hai yahan magar,
    Teri likhavat ka rubab alag hota hai”

    Little constructive criticism of i may…
    You have to take care of the gender of every word coz in hindi every word has its own gender according to its pronounciation, for example..
    In third line, (according to me) reet is a feminine word and the line should be.. ” na samjhe reet duniya ki” or “na samjhe rivaaj duniya ke”
    Also avoid extra words in a line, they break the rythm and that sometimes makes it difficult to connect with the writing.

  6. saurav bansal

    December 6, 2019 at 3:32 PM

    (third time typing my comment, agar abhi bhi post nahi hua to call krk bol dunga, ek or baar nahi likh paaunga… 😛 ;))

    osum jaan.. beautiful work..

    “har kisi ka najariya alag hota hai,
    yun hi nahi ravaaiya alag hota hai,
    bahuton ka shaunk hai likhna magar
    teri likhawat ka andaaz alag hota hai”

    first of all many congratulations for THEPOEMIE.COM
    l’l constructive criticism if i may:
    words in hindi have gender differences according to their pronunciation. kindly take care of that, for example third line should be:
    “na samjhe reet duniya ki” or “na samjhe rivaaz duniya ke”

    also try to avoid extra words in a line as they disturb the rythm of the poem which makes it difficult to connect with the writing.

    {all of the above is a personal point of view and should not be taken as an attempt of discouragement}

    • Jahnabee

      December 7, 2019 at 7:49 AM

      Thankew mote for your appreciation and also to analyse it deeply with my areas of improvement..
      I will definitely keep your points in my mind while writing another one

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